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I liked it. I'll get this part over with first- your rhyming was a tad bit off. Nothing too major that I can say to change, since everyone else tore ...

Wow. The rhyming was brilliant!! :D I like it. Somehow, it portrays life in a deep, different perspective, and it isn't quite bad at all!! :wink: So good job, and ...

OKay, first I think that your flow was a little bit off. Some parts it was great, the other I was like, oh. :roll: Ow? Did you mean oh? Just ...

Wow. Powerful stuff. Not the weed, the song lyrics. :roll: I think that this is really good. You should play it or something like that. Your lyrics are always very ...

Awww man dude. :shock: I always love your songs. Especially the screaming. :D But mostly, I love how they are so deep, and how they portray your feelings in a ...

Wow. Okay, that was really good. It shows your emotions clearly. But I think that the flow was a little choppy in the first and second paragraphs. Other than that, ...

Aww! You MC is so sweet! :D I love it. I am curious though to where you are going with this. You left it open for many possibilities...ah, anyways, wonderful. ...

oooh... Benjamin. Romantic name, is it not? :wink: Okay, I like it so far. Easy to read. Easy to relate to. The beginning draws you in. :D Woderful job already. ...

Okay, I like this, but I"m also a tad bit confused. I think that you rushed a little bit. And her Dad? Was her mom and dad divorced or something? ...

Wow. This probably isn't going to help a lot, but I love your story. I think that it's interesting and believable. The action and the characters drew me in, and ...

Aww! I Think that it was very good. The only part that I didn't get was when it said, 'I got my wish, in the form of a girl, A ...

I do not care what the other people say- no offense other people- but I think that you should keep it just the way that it is. It shows the ...

Wow. i LOVE LOVE LOVE this! It all works so great together. One line leads to another line , like a , like a , puzzle! (That was my favorite ...

[quote="BATCHICK785"]I don’t know how all this happens, but it does, and it happens to me. It seems that I always get the fallen angel on my shoulder that’s screwing up ...

Your description is well...amazing! I have some questions though, Is she an angel? Or is she a faery? Hell's angel? Pixie? Her eyes, I know, are what draws the people ...